plum trees blossom pink
cow bells ring in the meadow
rustlers are busy
	
	
	
cow bells ring in the meadow
rustlers are busy
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					japan's wild west
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		plum trees blossom pink cow bells ring in the meadow rustlers are busy 
		
		
		11-16-2018, 12:45 PM 
	
	 (11-15-2018, 12:30 PM)billy Wrote: plum trees blossom pink Subtle; nice images. I try to [over]interpret the apostrophe on L3, then desist. Alert guards on bamboo watchtowers, seeking fruitlessly for a reason bells sound in the darkness below. One of them returns his bow to its case and brushes this spring haiku by the light of a hanging fire-pot. He recites it to his comapanions, who laugh over sake bowls as thieves lead their prizes away.  Non-practicing atheist 
		
		
		11-16-2018, 01:35 PM 
	
	 
		Second line brings some nice imagery. I don't understand the apostrophe in rustler's but overall it's a nice little haiku.
	 
		
		
		11-16-2018, 02:26 PM 
	
	 
		thanks guys, yep it should be rustlers, will sort it out now. thanks.
	 
		
		
		11-16-2018, 09:26 PM 
(This post was last modified: 11-16-2018, 09:26 PM by RiverNotch.)
	
	 
		I don't really have a gripe with the piece, but I am disappointed this didn't end up being about Japan's real wild west, the world of the Sengoku-jidai.
	 
		
		
		11-17-2018, 02:06 AM 
	
	 
		Really like the blush pink of the plums cow-bells ? love the field sound and plant image this captures the double play on rustlers between plant and cow twist the end just the right amount. A solid short Billy, much enjoyed If your undies fer you've been smoking through em, don't peg em out | 
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