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Appetizing
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#1
06-11-2019, 06:30 AM
Appetizing (Senryu)


One grows gluttonous
in good company, which food
merely enhances.
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06-11-2019, 06:47 AM
I agree, but find the 'which' to be questionable
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06-11-2019, 09:59 PM
(06-11-2019, 06:47 AM)CRNDLSM Wrote:  I agree, but find the 'which' to be questionable

Hmmm... substitute "that," or perhaps remove the comma before "which?"

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06-20-2019, 12:15 AM
No nits to pick that I see. ‘Which’ seems grammatically/contextually accurate, referring to ‘good comapny’. Certainly wouldn’t delete the comma. Well done.
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