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addy Offline
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#1
01-21-2011, 01:56 PM
When rain comes I love to see
Umbrellas sprout like poppies,
The blossom of shivering days.

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billy Offline
Are you alluding to me?
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#2
01-24-2011, 10:43 AM
i like this one addy.
love the last line.

thanks for the read.
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#3
01-24-2011, 01:24 PM
I agree with Billy. The last line is almost a poem in itself, perhaps a haiku. And the "poppies" simile is beyond divine.
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#4
01-30-2011, 07:34 PM
Hi!
Today in my city - rain ...
I see your poem from my window!
Excellent!
R.Y.
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The Dog's Bollocks.
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#5
02-11-2011, 12:09 PM
Thanks for the feedback guys! Glad you liked Smile
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