Haunted Woods
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Haunted Woods

I ask the Live Oaks
at the edge of the forest,
"What are you hiding?"
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(08-06-2020, 04:04 AM)Torkelburger Wrote:  I ask the Live Oaks
at the edge of the forest,
"What are you hiding?"
I think this one performs better if the title is included. What I mean is, as a haiku the title is pretty much cheating. As a short poem the title helps the piece along (as it's meant to) without being intrusive.
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#3
Thank you. I've edited the original post and added the title.
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#4
For me the Live Oaks makes this.

(08-06-2020, 04:04 AM)Torkelburger Wrote:  Haunted Woods

I ask the Live Oaks
at the edge of the forest,
"What are you hiding?"
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