Celestial Ascent (Lai)

[Torkelburger]

Celestial Ascent (Lai form)

appearing so soon
some hours after noon
dark skies
hear a robin's tune
above the lagoon
will rise
like a white balloon
seeing the full moon
a prize

[Semicircle]

Celestial Ascent (Lai form)

appearing so soon
some hours after noon
dark skies
hear a robin's tune
above the lagoon
will rise
like a white balloon
seeing the full moon
a prize   Not my favorite rhyme, kind of weak.

I liked this one, gives a clear visual.

Trimmed some of the fat,
yours SC.