So I March - edit

[dukealien]

...So I March


I could have been a dancer
or a drummer–
I’ve got rhythm
struggling too weakly
to step out...

So I March

I could have been a dancer
or a drummer–
I’ve got rhythm
struggling too weakly
to step out.

[CRNDLSM]

I like how this seems like a lament at not losing physical strength (struggling too weakly) but also mentally, march to the beat of your own drum, can't step out of line,

[TranquillityBase]

So I March

I could have been a dancer
or a drummer–
I’ve got rhythm
struggling too weakly
to step out.

Somehow I feel there's more to say here after those last two lines.  Or maybe I just like the poem enough I didn't want it to end there.

[Mark A Becker]

So I March

I could have been a dancer
or a drummer–
I’ve got rhythm
struggling too weakly
to step out.

Hi duke-
A very simple suggestion to tie the last line back to the title (which I think was your intent).

… so I march
-
-
-
to step out…

[dukealien]

edit;


...So I March


I could have been a dancer
or a drummer–
I’ve got rhythm
struggling too weakly
to step out...

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Thanks to all critics, especially  @Mark.  It's apparent that's just what the poem needs to clarify what's supposed to be going on.

The Soviets used to say "Quantity has a quality all its own."  Perhaps we can say that in poetry (or just writing?) "Simplicity has a complexity all its own."