Marooned ver. 3

[TranquillityBase]

Thanks for your critique Busker.  Honestly, I'm feeling like Sisyphus in relation to this poem.  I'm thinking I should go back to this poem's raw beginnings 10 months ago and start over.  Before I got myself marooned.  And got obsessed more with being marooned than with what I set out to do, which was simply to write about this person who had an enormous impact on my life for years after, even though I only knew her for a matter of hours.

[Mark A Becker]

Before I got myself marooned.  And got obsessed more with being marooned than with what I set out to do, which was simply to write about this person who had an enormous impact on my life for years after, even though I only knew her for a matter of hours.

Hey Tim-

Please then, simply write about the impact that person had on you, instead of hiding that behind the conceit of being marooned.  I know that I said that I didn't have an issue about being "marooned", but  you shouldn't let that obscure what you were trying to say.  Deep breath, and let us know about those "matter of hours".  We've all had em, but I wanna hear about yours. That said, this ain't a soap opera...

Mark