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Wealth of wisdom
is only bought
with coins of pain.
How long after picking up the brush, the first masterpiece?
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.
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(10-19-2021, 11:52 AM)Erthona Wrote: Wealth of wisdom
is only bought
with coins of pain.
This is a fun spin on common knowladge.
Good work.
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(10-19-2021, 11:52 AM)Erthona Wrote: Wealth of wisdom
is only bought
with coins of pain.
Then what I'd give to be a masochist xD
Idk how nice the work is, cuz somehow I feel if I've read enough poetry, especially Ancient Near Eastern wisdom poetry, I'd have encountered the same sentiment, stated in nearly the same way, multiple times.
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Hi Dale-
I'd suggest scratching "is only", subbing "gained" for "bought", and bringing "with coins" into L.2, after "bought" (or "gained").
That's all,
Mark
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Thanks guys, sorry to respond so late. Yeah, kind of hokey. just came to mind and for some reason I thought it was a good idea to post it.
dale
How long after picking up the brush, the first masterpiece?
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.