12-20-2021, 07:25 AM 
	
	
	
		two gaggles of geese
rehearsing their migration-
honking like rush hour
	
	
	
rehearsing their migration-
honking like rush hour
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		12-20-2021, 07:25 AM 
	
	 
		two gaggles of geese rehearsing their migration- honking like rush hour 
		
		
		12-23-2021, 06:02 AM 
	
	 (12-20-2021, 07:25 AM)Tiger the Lion Wrote: two gaggles of geese Hey Paul- HA HA ... a backed-up city in the sky. I wonder if they give each other the feather. A suggestion: maybe "for" instead of "their". Or not- it hits the Mark either way. I always like syllabic poems that use words like "hour" or "fire" which are, in fact, one syllable yet sound like two. Add a simple "s" and they do become two syllable words: it may be an subtle indication of a mental abnormality that I notice things like this... Mark | 
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