12-19-21
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two gaggles of geese
rehearsing their migration-
honking like rush hour
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(12-20-2021, 07:25 AM)Tiger the Lion Wrote:  two gaggles of geese
rehearsing their migration-
honking like rush hour

Hey Paul-

HA HA ... a backed-up city in the sky.  I wonder if they give each other the feather.

A suggestion:  maybe "for" instead of "their".  Or not- it hits the Mark either way.

I always like syllabic poems that use words like "hour" or "fire" which are, in fact, one syllable yet sound like two. 

Add a simple "s" and they do become two syllable words: it may be an subtle indication of a mental abnormality that I notice things like this...

Mark
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