Street Song

[TranquillityBase]

This empty street
shuns dark
for a sum of light and chance,
quick but opaque
a handful of stars
in the entrails of a naked ghost.

This empty street

oblique as any creature

shuns dark

for a sum of light and chance.



Quick as a highway of bones

its opaque hour is a paradigm:

a handful of stars

in the belly of a naked ghost.

[Semicircle]

This empty street
oblique, as any creature
shuns dark  shunning dark
for a sum of light and chance.   "For a chance of light"

Quick as a highway of bones   How is a highway quick? Surely the cars on it are.
its opaque hour is a paradigm:  "opaque hour" seems kind of clunky
a handful of stars
in the belly of a naked ghost.  "digesting in the stomach of a ghost"

Red text could be removed. 

Thanks for the read, 
sc.

[TranquillityBase]

This empty street
oblique, as any creature
shuns dark  shunning dark
for a sum of light and chance.   "For a chance of light"

Quick as a highway of bones   How is a highway quick? Surely the cars on it are.
its opaque hour is a paradigm:  "opaque hour" seems kind of clunky
a handful of stars
in the belly of a naked ghost.  "digesting in the stomach of a ghost"

Red text could be removed. 

Thanks for the read, 
sc.

Some good calls here SC.  Thanks.
I was using quick in its other meaning as "alive".  But I'm seeing the second stanza does not clearly relate to the first.