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Radiator Husky

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#1
10-16-2022, 06:05 AM
Head withdraws
into crack

Steam whirlpool,
tag jingling.
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#2
10-16-2022, 10:09 PM
(10-16-2022, 06:05 AM)Semicircle Wrote:  Head withdraws
into crack

Personally, I'd like a bit more to go on.  Title gives a broad hint, but still seems to end too soon.
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#3
10-17-2022, 12:35 PM
You're right, it was too short. The husky is the rabbit entering the rabbit hole.
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