Grave digga
#1
Words ain't worth their weight in dirt

Action's worth in words

Does is and nothin' more

fillin' a hole
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#2
(11-05-2022, 06:11 AM)Semicircle Wrote:  Words are ain’t worth their weight in dirt

Action is worth its weight in words  (but words are weightless- maybe “worth its weight in work”)

Keep shoveling up the earth

Show your money's worth

Hi slicer-
The first two lines ate pretty good, but the last two are a bit of a let down.
Not sure what to suggest, but I think going for the rhyme doesn’t help.
Mark
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#3
Action is a word without recognition

epitaph



Thanks for the suggestions Mark.
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