Thank you for joy

[busker]

Thank you for joy

Thank you for joy
and birds in the morning
and the pear shaped willow
lighting up in tranches.
Thank you for branches 
bursting breathless with flowers,
welcoming swallows
in the morning.

https://birdlife.org.au/bird-profiles/welcome-swallow/

[Magpie]

The second half of the poem is beautiful and worthy of being a poem in itself. 
It's the repetition of 'in the morning' that seems off. 
'swallows in the morning' is essentially the same as 'birds in the morning' from the first half.
Just a thought,
Cheers

[busker]

The second half of the poem is beautiful and worthy of being a poem in itself. 
It's the repetition of 'in the morning' that seems off. 
'swallows in the morning' is essentially the same as 'birds in the morning' from the first half.
Just a thought,
Cheers

thanks, ambroisial - good point on the birds / swallows not achieving the desired effect. Will give it some thought.

[Bunx]

I read a love letter to earth mother nature maybe God. Beautiful way to end the night.. thanks for the read