Poem: Voice - Help with last line

[carahmellow]

I really like this poem I'm working on, but I'm struggling with the last line. I have so many options that could work, but I can't figure out which one works best.. and sounds the most impactful. Maybe you have some ideas.

Voice

Were it Frost who penned
The Raven
Late that dreary night,
Would the masses
Praise the gothic tale
In his simple, golden light?
For his voice is great
And all his own,
Colloquial and bright.
We must remember,
Inside our pen
Breathes a voice;
We must not fight.


We must not fight. 
We feel is right.
We should not fight.
We should not spite.
Sleeps a voice, we must excite... Kind of leaning toward this.
Hides/holds a voice, we must ignite... i like this one too
delight?
You guys might have some ideas...
I also like holds.... meaning, its not hiding per say.. the pen is just holding your own, personal voice.
what do you relate to the most as a writer yourself?
I can't help laugh at the irony of this post.. but oh well.

[Bunx]

Voices a Breath
Quills ink ignite

Maybes!?

[Knot]

Hi Carah,
can you explain 'golden light'? If it's a reference it eludes me (no surprise there.)

Best, Knot

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[carahmellow]

Hi Carah,
can you explain 'golden light'? If it's a reference it eludes me (no surprise there.)

Best, Knot

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I find that Frost's work often balances serious themes with a "light" quality. He uses conversational language which allows readers to engage with his work pretty easily. It's not that he never tackles sad topics, its just that his work doesnt have the dark gothic melencholic tone that Poe might have. And golden was eluding to Nothing Gold Can Stay, which is one of his most famous poems (Stay Gold Ponyboy.. Stay Gold, is another reference to it that you might know)... I wanted to elude to one of his most famous works to contrast with Poes. I may have missed the mark there though... lol

[Knot]

Hi Carah,
thanks. Thought it might be that, but could be sure.
Reading both the poem and your reply I'm not sure what is being compared (and why) - also, there seems to be an 'or' missing.
If Frost had written the Raven would we (there's something rather judgemental about 'the masses') still remember/treasure/appreciate it if it was written in a plainer language or would we ... what?
(Personally I'm not sure there's much value in this comparison, but happy to be persuaded otherwise. It just feels like arguing that one style of music is 'better' than another.)

Best, Knot

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[Magpie]

I really like this poem I'm working on, but I'm struggling with the last line. I have so many options that could work, but I can't figure out which one works best.. and sounds the most impactful. Maybe you have some ideas.

Voice

Were it Frost who penned
The Raven
Late that dreary night,
Would the masses
Praise the gothic tale
In his simple, golden light?
For his voice is great
And all his own,
Colloquial and bright.
We must remember,
Inside our pen
Breathes a voice;
We must not fight.

I know you're just looking for help with the last line but for me the repetition of voice in the last part of the poem is slightly jarring. The 'For his voice is great' line could have a different word to voice, the second 'voice' at the end is the more important one. 

Also I'm more inclined to accept a voice sleeping than breathing in the second last line.

The poem is good overall, cheers for the read.