Reflections Wall

[Bunx]

Reflection Wall

Witness fears of streets.
Construct colors protection,
refection of self.

Pride is black or grey
Far from trouble I should stay.
Reflect green, gray, brown, off white.
Colors matter of fact.

All colors turn to black.

[rowens]

Bunx,


You have music in you. I think that a tendency to rhyme comes natural to people who live by rhythm.

If I have to give feedback: I'll say that when you realize that your mind and feelings are rhyming, and it feels so natural, with poetry, that is a good time to stop and
kinda disrupt the flow. I think that really good lines of poetry often come when you break the bouncy rhyming flow and say to yourself: This is coming too easy.
I need to stop and do something novel and beyond my normal, day to day thoughts with this.

It feels kind of like a hard carving in your mind. You stop, and play with the sonics and meanings of words. This makes the poetry richer.

[Bunx]

I remember you mentioning this before. I'll admit when I was struggling I couldn't stop rhyming it was almost symptomatic, haha automatically. I'll try and a rest here of there. I appreciate that

[rowens]

Rhyme is something you use.


You use everything.
The sounds of words, the meanings, the multiple meanings.

It's kinda odd. People always said such things to me. "Don't write about your feelings. Nobody cares about your feelings."
And now, you read Poetry Magazine, it's all about trauma and how people feel and sticking it to the pretentious gods of poetry.

.................


Poetry is about playing with the very way we experience reality. Which is language. Sounds. Images in the head.
Images in the body.



I'm gonna flip back to busker's poem in the Pig's Arse and continue this rant.

No offence, busker. I'm serious.

[Bunx]

Not all my poems are about me but they are about my feelings on the matter

[rowens]

Yeah. I have often heard that it's harder and better to write about other things than yourself.

I think this comes from John Keats's comment about Shakespeare being the greatest poet because he wrote universally and not personally.

That is something to consider.
But if we can write beautifully about ourselves, that's Beauty aint it?

[Bunx]

It is. Or see the beauty in the pain and love we are not apart of.
Agreed 100%

In the age of AI I think if they "AI" learns poets abd writers have an obligation
To teach love through weakness, family through loss, growth and pain

[rowens]

I just asked you about a movie in another post.

I'm going to ask you another.

You ever seen that movie called AI with the kid from The Sixth Sense?


What Forum are we in? Oh Haiku.

All right then.

[Bunx]

Hahaha I love the sixth sense yo I'm PMing a hallucination I had last month. I have seen AI Robin Williams

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Here is a haiku

Lalliacs bloom this time
Where the ghosts of Bonner Park
Stroll by basketball

[rowens]

You ever seen The Basketball Diaries?

[Bunx]

Nope I need a movie night now haha

Looks awesome