I might not look at the leaves at all tomorrow
#1
Yellow red maples can frame
your bicycle, the river’s roll may bathe your voice,
sunbeams through wood will kiss
your hair.
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#2
Delightful. Hints in title and L2, then payoff at the end.
feedback award Non-practicing atheist
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#3
very sweet. I love the subversion and the fluidity of the form. I also very much like the incorporation of the title into the meaning of the poem. It adds some refreshing depth to what would be a pretty, descriptive poem without it. I have a hard time coming up with anything to be upset about in this very sweet poem.
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