Run Right Back To Me

[Bananaman10]

Run Right Back To Me

I can’t count how many times we cried together.
I really thought you’d stay with me forever.
“I have no sense of self when I look at you”.
Now I get to say these words to someone new.

God knows how much I loved your laugh,
I don’t have a clue how you hated it.
I loved you so much, I loved you on your behalf.
I guess I just didn’t know when to quit.

I prayed to God to make you right for me.
I’m sure the angels can sympathize,
Though you don’t seem to be as holy.
Heaven is witness to how I agonize.
I never thought I’d be this lonely.

I’m still going through withdrawal from you.
A healthy mind can be corrupted.
Your lips were poison imbued.
I’d kill to hug you undisrupted.

We swore we’d never leave each other.
Instead, life chose that I’d suffer.
The fatal memory of your kiss;
I had never experienced such bliss.

The sweetest voice once exclaimed
“You have such cute dimples”.
An innocent voice once pained
“You can’t do this to me” in between whimpers,
As I write this poem about how I still miss her,
She’s probably guzzling down bottles of liquor.

Sometimes all I think about is you,
Late nights in the middle of June.
Crying out “Don’t leave me so soon”,
How could I ever get through?

And when you runaway,
I need you to run right back to me.
Run right back to me,
I need you to run right back to me,
More specifically, C.

[Wjames]

Run Right Back To Me

I can’t count how many times we cried together.
I really thought you’d stay with me forever.
“I have no sense of self when I look at you”.
Now I get to say these words to someone new.

God knows how much I loved your laugh, I like the rhythm of this line. It's written in iambic meter: god KNOWS how MUCH i LOVED your LAUGH - alternating unstressed and stressed syllables. It rolls along and is pleasant to read aloud (and aloud in your head). I think it's very difficult to write rhyming poetry effectively without using a steady meter to sort of lend weight to the rhymes - makes them fit in and feel natural and less forced.
I don’t have a clue how you hated it.
I loved you so much, I loved you on your behalf. I like the idea of loving someone on their own behalf and the rhyme with laugh is nice. I think as above, the rhyme would feel more natural if it matched the meter of the line it rhymes with - I.e: i LOVED you ON your OWN beHALF. Adding own keeps the iambic syllable pattern with the line it rhymes with - makes it feel more natural, at least to my ear.
I guess I just didn’t know when to quit.

I prayed to God to make you right for me.
I’m sure the angels can sympathize,
Though you don’t seem to be as holy.
Heaven is witness to how I agonize.
I never thought I’d be this lonely.

I’m still going through withdrawal from you.
A healthy mind can be corrupted.
Your lips were poison imbued.
I’d kill to hug you undisrupted.

We swore we’d never leave each other.
Instead, life chose that I’d suffer.
The fatal memory of your kiss;
I had never experienced such bliss.

The sweetest voice once exclaimed
“You have such cute dimples”.
An innocent voice once pained 
“You can’t do this to me” in between whimpers,
As I write this poem about how I still miss her,
She’s probably guzzling down bottles of liquor.

Sometimes all I think about is you,
Late nights in the middle of June. 
Crying out “Don’t leave me so soon”,
How could I ever get through?

And when you runaway,
I need you to run right back to me.
Run right back to me,
I need you to run right back to me,
More specifically, C.

Hey Bananaman, the main thought I had when reading the poem is that it felt a little too dependant on rhyming that feels forced. Rhymes should be a pleasant surprise and feel natural - in a good song, the rhymes hit at the right spot in the natural progression of a melody and beat. 

I think in poetry, meter is the melody and beat equivalent, and it can be used to make rhymes feel less shoe horned in. Rhyming can be used effectively without meter, but I can't explain why it sometimes does.

I like the sentiment but I don't think the rhyming is enhancing what you are trying to say.

[carahmellow]

Run Right Back To Me

I can’t count how many times we cried together.
I really thought you’d stay with me forever.
“I have no sense of self when I look at you”.
Now I get to say these words to someone new.

God knows how much I loved your laugh,
I don’t have a clue how you hated it. I dont like how you jumped from past to present tense in this stanza. This line is also a little off. 
I loved you so much, I loved you on your behalf.
I guess I just didn’t know when to quit.

I prayed to God to make you right for me.
I’m sure the angels can sympathize,
Though you don’t seem to be as holy.
Heaven is witness to how I agonize.
I never thought I’d be this lonely.

I’m still going through withdrawal from you.
A healthy mind can be corrupted.
Your lips were poison imbued.
I’d kill to hug you undisrupted.

We swore we’d never leave each other.
Instead, life chose that I’d suffer. - I think this needs to be "I would" for flow... 
The fatal memory of your kiss;
I had never experienced such bliss. 

The sweetest voice once exclaimed
“You have such cute dimples”.
An innocent voice once pained
“You can’t do this to me” in between whimpers,
As I write this poem about how I still miss her, - you have been speaking in second person through the whole poem.. this line in third is a bit jarring and throws it off. Maybe change "her" to "you".
She’s probably guzzling down bottles of liquor. - same with this one as well.... "her" to "you"

Sometimes all I think about is you,
Late nights in the middle of June. - great line
Crying out “Don’t leave me so soon”,
How could I ever get through?

And when you runaway,
I need you to run right back to me.
Run right back to me,
I need you to run right back to me,
More specifically, C.

This is a great poem... I could really tell how you were feeling writing it, and it was really easy to understand, but i think its a little wordy. Try being a bit more intentional with each word you are choosing... I used to struggle with this a lot as well.  right now it sounds a bit amateur. I think this would be great as spoken word, but the flow feels a really off as a reader... Almost like, I'm trying to make it rhyme and flow... but it's just not hitting naturally which is causing it to feel clumsy. I think just trimming it up a little bit would be great, you have a great thing going so far! 

[spencedude75]

OK. I really like the vision here. I just think it needs more precision in both language and form (most specifically the rhyme). To begin with the rhyming, it feels a bit forces, especially because there is no consistent rhyme scheme across the whole poem.  Some of the lines are very nice (esp. as someone else pointed out, the brief usage of iambic pentameter) As far as language goes, maybe try and avoid some cliche ("I can't count how many times" "I'm still going through withdrawal from you") and just some more general precision. 
Nice start, though!

[ton321]

I thought lines six and eight were the most interesting/ less cliched. But the first half was all that was needed. I felt the emotion most in these lines. As others have said the stanza varies and so does the meter in this piece but it has what it needs to start with ie real emotion, that comes through.

Tony