Cold Mornings
#1
we conjure the self in narratives
writ with an alchemy of
anxiety and caffeine.
(God bless the good cafe)
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#2
For a short poem, “an alchemy of” is too many words IMO
How about ‘writ with anxiety / and caffeine’?
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#3
I would go one step further and make the last line the title and incorporate 'cold' into the poem.

eg 
cold we are conjured
writ with anxiety, saved
by the alchemy of caffeine.

play with it.  There is a lot to work with.  nice piece.
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