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Every Cell is a Star
No Will. Love is Conflict. Lust is Pure
I + Now = the Only Reality
Everything else is Video Game
Characters
. . .
We are all Video Game
Characters
Now+You=the Only Reality
. . .
Every Star is a Sun
Everyone is a Patchwork of Realities
Throw your burden in the
water
It will swim
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Love the final strophe
The first two don’t feel gimmicky. They all go nicely together
Nice work
Get rid of the cringeworthy subtitle in small letters
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I could replace the motto with this one:
Marriage is a crime against humanity. Anxiety is a framework of cowardice. Love is a prison that can be enjoyed.
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(02-20-2025, 12:54 AM)rowens Wrote: I could replace the motto with this one:
Marriage is a crime against humanity. Anxiety is a framework of cowardice. Love is a prison that can be enjoyed.
I'd say lose the motto altogether, but you're not being serious, like the Beatles in Abbey Road.
Not that you're the Beatles, but you've done a film, and they did three, so that's there...
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My mottos are arbitrarily absolute. They are meant to be 100% true to me, as they are false or lame or stupid or whatever else to anyone else. My ways aren't fool-proof but full-proof. Difference completes me. The Good Neighbors, Them Others. What the Devil says is True for him: Opposition is True Friendship. A married woman is more attractive than a virgin. Indian Jones' walk across the abyss beats going through It, as the bridge he crosses isn't there. Your words are the bridge that isn't there, but you said them, so they are. Same and Different.
Seriousness Means a Death.
Some asshole wrote a poem about that.