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[poetry_zealot]

Here, i shall build
a grand cathedral—


each stone
lovingly cauterized
to preserve the whispers
           that permeate its hide;


each window
desperately stained
by a fading rainbow
shedding its wretched skin;


each altar
indifferently crafted by
the foot of god
for its devout insects;


each mural
paints itself
onto oblique walls
(starting from their tears)—


so when the moon sets,
and the son doesn't rise,
i shall preach at the altar
to listen for reverent echoes.

[JamesG]

I like this although I do have a couple of suggestions, which you may feel free to ignore ;0)

Here, i shall build  is the lower case "i" here intentional?
a grand cathedral—   I think that a Catherdral would be great not grand, a hotel is grand. And the great is probably redundant perhaps? 


each stone
lovingly cauterized   Not sure if there is a more apt word here to use than cauterized, maybe sealed?  
to preserve the whispers
           that permeate its hide;


each window
desperately stained
by a fading rainbow
shedding its wretched skin;
Love this verse


each altar
indifferently crafted by
the foot of god
for its devout insects;


each mural
paints itself
onto oblique walls
(starting from their tears)—
Not sure this makes sense?

so when the moon sets,
and the son doesn't rise,
i shall preach at the altar
to listen for reverent echoes.

[The_system_screams]

Reading this poem a few times it hit me how powerful the images and the juxtaposition of what one thinks a cathedral should represent:
second stanza: "cauterized" and "hide"
third stanza: "desperately" "shedding" "wretched" "skin"
fourth stanza: "indifferently", "devout insects"
fifth stanza: "oblique" "tears"
and the final stanza just a masterpiece of bringing it all together.

TL;DR Love it, don't change a thing. This is grand. This is a cathedral. Thank you for sharing.