~Villanelle~

[whisperer]

Can we find silence in all this noise?
Fear is the dictator that rules the day.
Aren't we just children playing with our toys?


Thieves come to rob us our little joys
So many voices with so much to say.
Can we find silence in all this noise?


We have grown into spiritual decoys
Screaming and streaming for something to say
Aren't we just children playing with our toys?


High vibration and these spiritual ploys
Manifesting, the universe at play.
Can we find silence in all this noise?


Tik Toking breadcrumbs our psyche enjoys
Leading our minds to wander astray 
Aren't we just children playing with our toys?


The Real world is boring and annoys
And we get upset when our stuff’s taken away.
Can we find silence in all this noise?
Aren't we just children playing with our toys?


* I do not have a working title for this. I am open to suggestions 

[rowens]

Maybe: Are we not just children playing with toys? ?
Or keep 'our', although the 'our' in "our little joys" already hints at it. That comes down to nuance of meaning and feeling.
Simply: Are we not just children playing with toys? is smoother.

[whisperer]

Maybe: Are we not just children playing with toys? ?
Or keep 'our', although the 'our' in "our little joys" already hints at it. That comes down to nuance of meaning and feeling.
Simply: Are we not just children playing with toys? is smoother.

Thank you for taking the time to read this and leave this review. I appreciate your feedback and your suggestion is very fluid and adds a smoother finish. Thank you for that.

[palifan]

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Can we find silence in all this noise?
Fear is the dictator that rules the day.
Aren't we just children playing with our toys?


Thieves come to rob us our little joys
So many voices with so much to say.
Can we find silence in all this noise?


We have grown into spiritual decoys
Screaming and streaming for something to say
Aren't we just children playing with our toys?


High vibration and these spiritual ploys
Manifesting, the universe at play.
Can we find silence in all this noise?


Tik Toking breadcrumbs our psyche enjoys
Leading our minds to wander astray 
Aren't we just children playing with our toys?


The Real world is boring and annoys
And we get upset when our stuff’s taken away.
Can we find silence in all this noise?
Aren't we just children playing with our toys?


* I do not have a working title for this. I am open to suggestions 

Really enjoy this. I like the overall theme that you repeat throughout.

[whisperer]

Thank you for taking the time to read this and leave a kind review. Much appreciated

[tun]

Can we find silence in all this noise?
Fear is the dictator that rules the day.
Aren't we just children playing with our toys?


Thieves come to rob us our little joys
So many voices with so much to say.
Can we find silence in all this noise?


We have grown into spiritual decoys
Screaming and streaming for something to say
Aren't we just children playing with our toys?


High vibration and these spiritual ploys
Manifesting, the universe at play.
Can we find silence in all this noise?


Tik Toking breadcrumbs our psyche enjoys
Leading our minds to wander astray 
Aren't we just children playing with our toys?


The Real world is boring and annoys
And we get upset when our stuff’s taken away.
Can we find silence in all this noise?
Aren't we just children playing with our toys?


* I do not have a working title for this. I am open to suggestions 

This poem makes me smile and it seems to refer to the catastrophe of our age - the human desire to avoid experiencing unmediated reality. At first I thought it was obtuse and heavy handed, but now I don't think so. The last line asks the question - But what is the answer? If we were once children playing with toys - What are we now? This is great.

But when a child plays with a toy, that is a positive thing. And, you know, play is a positive thing, even for adults to do, right? Because it connects us with spontaneity. But is our attachment to our mobile devices play? And is it cultivating in us spontaneity? So that we can, in a sense, say, yes, we're still children playing with our toys, but it seems a lot darker than that to me.

It seems that our mobile devices are not cultivating our capacity for spontaneity. In fact, what they're doing to young people is the opposite. They're depriving them of their faculties, the very faculties that, you know, spontaneity requires.

[whisperer]

This is the greatest compliment ever. It made you think, then question, then think about your questions and think again. So very kind of you to share your thoughts. Thank you