snowku

[Magpie]

revised version 

snow two three four five
snow two three four five winter
- cut two three four snow



old version 

one two three four five
one two three four five winter
-- cut two three four five

[wasellajam]

one two three four five
one two three four five winter
-- cut two three four five

Getting both the tedium of winter and watching snow pile.
One long winter?

[Magpie]

Getting both the tedium of winter and watching snow pile.
One long winter?

Unintentional, but I'll take it. It makes more sense now. 
It was just a flippant take on haikus and the insistence of 17 syllables, season and cut.

might change it to 

snow two three four five
snow two three four five winter
- cut two three four snow

then it incorporates both possibilities 

Thanks Ella

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and then the title would be snowku I suppose instead of shitku

I wrote a shit poem and you gave it a semblance of meaning. cheers for doing all the heavy lifting

[wasellajam]

Getting both the tedium of winter and watching snow pile.
One long winter?

Unintentional, but I'll take it. It makes more sense now. 
It was just a flippant take on haikus and the insistence of 17 syllables, season and cut.

might change it to 

snow two three four five
snow two three four five winter
- cut two three four snow

then it incorporates both possibilities 

Thanks Ella

---

and then the title would be snowku I suppose instead of shitku

I wrote a shit poem and you gave it a semblance of meaning. cheers for doing all the heavy lifting

ha, you owe me one on one of my shit poems.