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05-11-2026, 11:22 AM
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Sculpin and mollusk devour
soft tissue, snot worms colonize bone,
urchins form a phalanx:
in my garden, spiderwort blooms.
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L1 might be completely disposed of,
L2 might be broken in two,
L4 might receive a verb,
and L5 might be connected with a colon or em dash:
Sculpin and mollusk
devour soft tissue,
snot worms colonize bone,
urchins form a phalanx:
in my garden, spiderwort blooms.
Posts: 497
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Joined: Jan 2013
Thanks for reading & your thoughts, River, I made most of your suggestions, just moved devour up, I think it's a better line break.
I think it's cleaner now.
