Consequence
#1
Consequence

The one I love 
has died. Today, 
that’s a useful lie. 

But one day
it will be the truth
and I won’t know why.
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#2
(Yesterday, 01:59 AM)matsunosuperfan Wrote:  Consequence

The one I love 
has died. Today, 
that’s a useful lie. 

But one day
it will be the truth
and I won’t know why.

The last line is just there to rhyme with “lie”, isn’t it?
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#3
(Yesterday, 01:59 AM)matsunosuperfan Wrote:  Consequence

The one I love 
has died. Today, 
that’s a useful lie. 

But one day
it will be the truth
and I won’t know why.

Good job using simple language to express how current loss is amplified by shooting it into the future. Still caring about the not knowing doubles the poem's immediacy. Well done.
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