LPiA-26 Nov. 8
#1
Let's Pretend it's April - Nov. 8

Rules: Write a poem for LPiA on the topic or form described. Each poem should appear as a New Reply to this thread. The goal is to, at the end of the month, have written 30 poems for the month of November. (or one, or six, or fifteen) Prompts may be revisited at any time. All members are welcome.

Topic : Write a poem inspired by an Aging Rock Star
Form : Any
Line requirements: 8 or more

Feel free to reply with comments or kudos as you wish. 

Questions?
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#2
Dont overlook details! Getting a head-
sup on camera footage in the morning
automatically eliminated
Frank, Chris, Joe, and Donna not seen walking

in the doors or clocking in at all.  Bill-
y Gibbons walked in, checking on his cars,
high-end custom builds. Celebrities will
spend this kind of money. Hmm. Seeing stars...

Why did Dave suggest Joe if Joe wasn't 
there? Why did we rule out Dave again? Where
was everyone when it happened? Doesn't
Stan have Billy in his contacts? The hair

in forensics was unidentified,
investigation's proving quite a ride.
Peanut butter honey banana sandwiches
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#3
Rock Star


He started small
discovered many years ago
by accident.
Made a name for himself
when he was big.
Best known for
his blues
but hard
that gem-like flame
you read about
now soldiers on
artificially grown
heat-enhanced
but quintessentially
star sapphire.

Was going to do a Korean pop star, but the research bogged down.
feedback award Non-practicing atheist
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#4
Rock and Roll / Run Devil Run


Lennon had split up
with Ono when he made
an album of his youth,
the couple reconciling
by the tracks' release,

while Paul had such recourse
by the time he split
with Linda for the first
and only time, breast cancer
cutting her life short.
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#5
(11-09-2026, 01:22 PM)RiverNotch Wrote:  Rock and Roll / Run Devil Run


Lennon had split up
with Ono when he made
an album of his youth,
the couple reconciling
by the tracks' release,

while Paul had such recourse
by the time he split
with Linda for the first
and only time, breast cancer
cutting her life short.

Dude whatever you're drinking lately, don't stop. This is witty, sharp, engaging, and somehow poignant by the end. Great work with voice and brevity. Maybe some of the lineation could be stronger; I get a few final words that don't feel as important as the form is presenting them to be (made, recourse, first - not bad but "only" seems to deserve the emphasis more).

Strong piece, enjoyed reading it

"By the tracks release" for me the standout line, a wonderful double entendre

Even the somewhat stuffy "recourse" which I instinctively resist, is justified by the distant rhyme in the last line
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