Disappointment

[heslopian]

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[billy]

so you decided to show your face again

the poem spoken, is excellent as are some
of the facial expressions that mirror some of them

[heslopian]

Yeah. I saw other poets on DU doing it, and some of them aren't that good looking, so I thought why not But seriously, as you added this forum I hated to see it go to waste, and I don't think I'm such a carnival horror that my face can't be put on camera

[billy]

good for you, i personally refuse to be as brave.

[abu nuwas]

I thought I commented on this before. There must be a special reward for bravery beyond the call of duty -- showing your face, I mean - and it is at once something extra, and distracting. I think - in the nicest possible way - it reflects your age, being greatly introspective. That is really as it should be: I find it frightening when I see children/teens marching along in little suits with their fathers in big suits, being sensible and grown up. They will have their moment when least wanted -- at forty, with wife and kids.

I hope this does not sound patronising, though I know it does. I am so mature that I would probably be too shy to do what you do -- even if I could work out how to do it! One concrete thing - again negative, I'm afraid. The 'going down like a lead ballon' bit really is cliche -- could you not maintain the conversational style, with some other phrase?

[heslopian]

Thank you for your feedback Mr. Nuwas. I'll have a think about how I can make that line more original.