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billy Offline
Are you alluding to me?
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#1
09-01-2011, 07:06 PM (This post was last modified: 09-13-2011, 12:26 PM by billy.)
leaves on coffin lid
we throw in our bit of soil
keep them down for good
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#2
09-02-2011, 08:21 AM
That ending slays me :hysterical

Humor aside, this is a pretty tight piece. Nice Smile

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#3
09-13-2011, 12:27 PM
thanks addy,

i changed him to them, to make it more generic.
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09-14-2011, 03:05 AM
Unless it winds up being a floater...
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