Wimbledon -
eating cream and strawberries
rain stops play
eating cream and strawberries
rain stops play
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WTF; Haiku
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09-15-2011, 04:35 PM
Does this count as Haiku because you have strawberries and rain in it?
I'm not trying to be flip - my understanding of Haiku is quite rudimentary.
PS. If you can, try your hand at giving some of the others a bit of feedback. If you already have, thanks, can you do some more?
09-15-2011, 05:04 PM
yes. rain is a part of nature as is food.
plus, the modern haiku is allowed to use modern images. i could have wrote; Wimbledon fortnight eating cream and strawberries- rain stops play which would be more compact and change the cutting line.
09-15-2011, 05:06 PM
PS. If you can, try your hand at giving some of the others a bit of feedback. If you already have, thanks, can you do some more?
09-15-2011, 05:30 PM
(09-15-2011, 05:04 PM)billy Wrote: yes. rain is a part of nature as is food.i'm removing the word fortnight to try and create a tighter image. Wimbledon eating cream and strawberries- rain stops play |
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