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Haiku: rustlers:

Haiku: rustlers:
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#1
10-22-2011, 06:30 PM


Porridge without cream
no cheese or cake for supper
where's my milk cow.
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#2
10-23-2011, 12:05 AM
The shorter last line makes it punchier, but I am unqualified in the haiku game Smile Made me smile. (Should you have a '?' instead of a period?)
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10-23-2011, 10:13 AM
possibly, though i'm not too sure hehe.

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