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     our mother earth
     a gentle rain
     she's MUD!


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(02-27-2012, 01:45 AM)Serah Wrote:  Cute, even though a Haiku is best known for its 5-7-5 syllable count, I have heard that it could also be mixed counts...I dunno. Where's the challenge than?

A gentle rain/ she's MUD! Just how many days was it gently raining for?? Smile

Arrg! Not the 5-7-5 urban legend again....
While resistance is futile, I always try:
See "Nazi UFO's and 5-7-5 haiku" in the poetry discussion thread.

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(02-26-2012, 07:35 AM)rayheinrich Wrote:  

     our mother earth
     a gentle rain
     she's MUD!


i think this is a great senryu
you make feel very personal to the reader

Serah; the syllable count doesn't matter that much as long as it's not 20 or so a line. (an exaggeration) between 2 and 9 would be a better statement but it's not hard and fast.
and a senryu has less restriction as to the content. as long as it has a cut point and a seasonal word it's pretty much anything goes in a senryu.
though clever word choices make for a better poem.
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