What became of

[Leanne]

Revision 30/6/12

Belly up, begging you
pardon my parting
once sang to sorrow
once held a laugh
on my tongue

Floating up
river queen, floating
by paddlewheel pushing
my age in the
wash of awake

Please keep my double-you
Oh, are de yes
close in your pop culture
pocketbook prayer

Belly up, wobble I
left into yesterday
wave to my want to be
long time forgotten and
buried in ash

v.1

Belly up, beg you
pardon my parting
I once sang to sorrow
I once held a laugh
on my tongue

Floating up
river queen, floating
by paddlewheel pushing
my age in the
wash of awake

Please keep my double-you
Oh, are de yes
close in your pop culture
pocketbook prayer

Belly up, wobble I
left into yesterday
wave to my want to be
no longer needed and
never to breathe

[billy]

it's really sing songy and i love it though i have no idea what it's about
am i able to love something i don't get?

okay. it's about things that have fallen out of fashion, phrases to be exact and fads, yes, lots of fads. it's also a neat little nonsense poem.

[Leanne]

that'll do

[billy]

i got a feel of spike milligan for some reason

[penguin]

Hello Leanne. I liked the rhythm of it too. I got the impression of some Kate Bush-like character eschewing fame for a proper life. But you'll probably tell me it's about a beached whale.
I think you could easily do without the 3rd verse.Though I like pop culture pocketbook prayer, I don't care for W-O-R-D-S.
Why not "fade into yesterday"? fade/wave.
Feels like there's a word missing at the end of the poem.again?

Ray

[Erthona]

Actually not sing song, but has that nice rhythmic quality you get with certain colloquial speech patterns. This one I think is obviously Aussie, no nonsense, outback, old man. Of course it also has a bit o'Ire inut!

[Leanne]

I always find different interpretations interesting. I could give you this one and let you go "ah, of course", but of course I won't because then that would close it off to your own meanings.

And as billy said, there's no requirement to understand everything absolutely to enjoy it (or not, as the case may be ).

i got a feel of spike milligan for some reason

That'll be my whiskers.

Hello Leanne. I liked the rhythm of it too. I got the impression of some Kate Bush-like character eschewing fame for a proper life. But you'll probably tell me it's about a beached whale.
I think you could easily do without the 3rd verse.Though I like pop culture pocketbook prayer, I don't care for W-O-R-D-S.
Why not "fade into yesterday"? fade/wave.
Feels like there's a word missing at the end of the poem.again?

Ray

Thanks Ray... there was perhaps more beached-whaleness than Kate Bushicity here originally, but whatever you take from it is going to be correct. Typically, the third verse is the one that's most important to what I was thinking in the first place so I'm attached to it (I already deleted two other verses shortly after posting, because they annoyed me!) -- without the third, though, there's no context and it's just a jumble (in my head anyway). Regarding left v fade, I intended left as the direction rather than a verb. I know the grammar is mixed up so parts of speech are not immediately apparent (and the perverse part of me, which is practically the whole lot, likes the ambiguity of words like "left"). I will think on the last line -- it's cumbersome and probably a bit too dramatic now, thanks very much for your input.

Actually not sing song, but has that nice rhythmic quality you get with certain colloquial speech patterns. This one I think is obviously Aussie, no nonsense, outback, old man. Of course it also has a bit o'Ire inut!

Dale, you and I must know very different old outback blokes!

[billy]

here's my genuine take on the the thing of it all. the Mississippi and the age of steam and all things on the river that have died or dying?