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Just another storm:

Just another storm:
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09-12-2012, 12:13 PM
thunder claps outside
shutters rattle on the house-
dog scratches his ear
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09-12-2012, 12:30 PM
Haha Smile. Aww, i like this one
PS. If you can, try your hand at giving some of the others a bit of feedback. If you already have, thanks, can you do some more?
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09-14-2012, 06:08 PM
thanks for the kind words guys.
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03-02-2017, 01:50 AM
(09-12-2012, 12:13 PM)billy Wrote:  thunder claps outside
shutters rattle on the house-
dog scratches his ear

I love the last line. The dog is so blase about it all.

I think that "outside" and "on the house" are obvious and don't need to be stated.
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