A haiku:

[billy]

as they promenade
ladies spin parasols-
I am mesmerised

[just mercedes]

as they promenade
ladies spin parasols-
I am mesmerised

Kewl - but if you're going for a traditional 'ku, your middle line is missing a syllable. Maybe 'their parasols'?

But if not, ignore this.

[billy]

Thanks jm


Traditional haiku had of 17 on (also known as morae), in three phrases of 5, 7 and 5 on respectively. Although haiku are often stated to have 17 syllables, this is inaccurate as syllables and on are not the same.
the western world adopted the 17 syllables more as a guideline. it was said the traditional haiku should be completed in one normal breath. the traditional haiku was called a Hokku and was part of a carry on or continuous poem called a renku or renga. now as haiku it's a stand alone poem.

a tradional hokku or haiku by matsuo basho


old pond . . .
a frog leaps in
water’s sound