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It's a little strange
how on December 31
everyone thinks of change.
Well, a 'New Year's Resolution'
is NOT the right solution.
We set them at the beginning of the year
hoping it will gear
us up for a difference.
But at the end of the year,
we steer with no reference.
Change is impossible to avoid.
So, why use your resolution as a defective steroid?
There has to be something better to do.
How many people do you know that grew?
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Hah!
Fantastic idea
I loved:
"Change is impossible to avoid.
So, why use your resolution as a defective steroid?"
the linebreak in:
"hoping it will gear
us up for a difference."
is unnecessary, you dont NEED that line to end in rhyme and it threw off my reading quite a lot ("us up for a difference" isn't even half a proper sentence).
I would personally suggest changing that to "hoping it will gear us up towards a difference"
a part from that I liked it.
If something happens and you can remedy it, Why worry?
And if something happens that you can't remedy, Still why worry?
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(12-06-2012, 05:46 PM)benthejack Wrote: Hah!
Fantastic idea
I loved:
"Change is impossible to avoid.
So, why use your resolution as a defective steroid?"
the linebreak in:
"hoping it will gear
us up for a difference."
is unnecessary, you dont NEED that line to end in rhyme and it threw off my reading quite a lot ("us up for a difference" isn't even half a proper sentence).
I would personally suggest changing that to "hoping it will gear us up towards a difference"
a part from that I liked it.
Thanks for your feedback.
and
"hoping it will gear
us up for a difference."
was meant to be one sentence. Maybe I should be them on the same line together then, huh? lol
I appreciate it!
