when it's finished.

[aaron]

What will it be like
when all of us have met him
and all have felt his love?

[benthejack]

Hi aaron,
I'm assuming this is a senryu?

this is nice, I can assume the subject matter from it. But "pleasant" doesn't really cut or stand out. Like in any composition you need a little contrast, something that surprises or engages the reader. Speaking from a design perspective (that I've believe also crosses over to poetry) you need to accomplish two tasks, the first and most important job of a piece is to capture a viewer's attention, only once you've done this you can tell your story (the second job that runs parallel to the first). So something with a little more punch would help this poem

(you also have 6 syllables in the last verse )
suggestion: "and have felt his love?" since you already have "all" in the line above.

cheers,
Ben