Prevailing Soft

[billy]

i like it a lot i think it borders both senryu and haiku.
the last line has a finality about it

[softlyfalling]

This is just beautiful. I almost think it would have more impact and power if the comparison in the last line is changed to inescapable truth, the outcome...like this
To bend and not break
Newborn leaves soft and supple
Brittle in death

[Truerenigma]

To bend and not break
Newborn leaves soft and supple
Brittle are the dead

This is a nice hybrid. Tells the story of all life from birth to death.

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This is just beautiful. I almost think it would have more impact and power if the comparison in the last line is changed to inescapable truth, the outcome...like this
To bend and not break
Newborn leaves soft and supple
Brittle in death

True, more exacting too, less abstract.