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I find this incredibly hard to read as a poem...no seperate lines/stanzas...it's just my personal opinion on poems, but I straight away don't read poems like this because it puts me off...I see you have used rhyme...so why not make this look like a poem?

"Words inside of words, I fool you not,
Only a few can view the plot.
Numeral four is etched in my stone;
Only ten days left to carve them alone."
"We are the music makers
And we are the dreamers of dreams
Wandering by lone sea breakers
And sitting by desolate streams" ~ Arthur O'Shaughnessy


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(02-23-2013, 07:34 PM)Murederum Wrote:  I suppose I've never liked the ideology of that structuring.

Sure, ideological structures can appear to be unnatural,
illogical (vis-à-vis historical development), and based on
the false assumption that they are the product of rational
evolutionary processes; but the fact remains:

the fucking thing is just too damn hard to read.

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Even for prose, something of this length will be divided into paragraphs. If a typical poetic structure is not to your liking, maybe a more reasonable paragraphing is more up your alley?
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