You

[softlyfalling]

I am not permitted to delete, it seems

[Heartafire]

You

How like a metal-taloned hand
Your influence upon my mind,
Your rape of arid land, red sand
Inside my head, your thrust unkind.

How like the claw of monstrous bird
Your grip into my naked flesh.
Within my bony frame, interred
My heart is pierced, the wound is fresh.

How hard you try my soul to wrest
From its sweet source, from force of light;
Still, I continue to be blessed
With wholeness you can never blight.

Searched for a nit as is protocol but wasn't able to uncover one. This is written beautifully, caps beginning each line a minor distraction, I assume tht is c/p, happens all the time. Nicely done SF.
Heart

[neena2504]

Hi Softlyfalling,

This is really good. I like the way you lost the auxillary verb in the 2nd line of every stanza, made it different.

Cheers

[softlyfalling]

thank you, lovely ladies...
I was a little afraid everyone might accuse me of descending into emo LOL

[NakedBear]

thank you, lovely ladies...
I was a little afraid everyone might accuse me of descending into emo LOL

Gasp! You've gone emo!

*finger-pointing*

EMO!



Mikey.

[softlyfalling]

thank you, lovely ladies...
I was a little afraid everyone might accuse me of descending into emo LOL

Gasp! You've gone emo!

*finger-pointing*

EMO!



Mikey.

OMFG! Don't cheer me up! Beauty is despair!! Life is empty without my emptiness!!!!!

[NakedBear]

thank you, lovely ladies...
I was a little afraid everyone might accuse me of descending into emo LOL

Gasp! You've gone emo!

*finger-pointing*

EMO!



Mikey.

OMFG! Don't cheer me up! Beauty is despair!! Life is empty without my emptiness!!!!!

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Sorry, off topic. But how can I NOT?

I stop now.

Mikey.