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hi jorden and welcome to the site.
i've read the 2 pieces of feedback you left so thanks for understanding how the site's supposed to work. looking forward to some of your poetry
(10-13-2014, 09:42 AM)musicismylife78 Wrote: Hi! I'm new. My name is Jordan. Come talk to me if you like... I won't bite! 
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I like biters. You need to change to fit in.
welcome aboard =)
Hey guys! Was on another site, but that's dead now, so I thought I'd move on!
Hey, hey, hey!
Nice to meet you all!
Ain't it a great day
to meet me in the fall?
My name is Laura
I'm rhyming with the flora
Tell me yours and be my friend
Thank you all so much,
I think you all are such a kindly bunch ~
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hi heartfire
i'm billy
it rhymes with wil..... 
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(10-19-2014, 02:33 AM)HeartFire Wrote: Hey guys! Was on another site, but that's dead now, so I thought I'd move on!
Hey, hey, hey!
Nice to meet you all!
Ain't it a great day
to meet me in the fall?
My name is Laura
I'm rhyming with the flora
Tell me yours and be my friend
Thank you all so much,
I think you all are such a kindly bunch ~
Hail and welcome,
And welcome and yo!
My name is Abu-
Or really Abu Nuwas
You will remem-
ber it because
Yes, you're right it
Rhymes, and rhymes so
Well with ARSE
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Hola there. Just joined a little while ago and made five reviews, seems like a good website so far 
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Hi, aa, welcome, and thanks for reading the rules.
We're all here to improve, the more specific the critique the easier it is for the poet to apply it to their work.
Hope you have fun here.
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Hello to all the many members I've not greeted. Please ignore my zombified appearance. That's just what happens when you've written as many years as i have, you become undead.
Happy Halloween and Happy Writing!
bena aka bean aka mel
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(10-09-2014, 11:00 PM)billy Wrote: we were all the same at one time or another... I'm guessing that time is "death".
(Which, this being a poetry site and all, comes close to being excessively appropriate.)
WELCOME! A passionate welcome to all my comrades in over-emotionality.
The most important thing to know about Pig Pen (besides it being important, of course)
is that, like writing and life, it is an illusion. But since the object of writing is to transcend reality;
who better to help you than imaginary people.
a brightly colored fungus that grows in bark inclusions
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Dammit Ray! I thought life was an ALLUSION! No wonder I've gotten it wrong all this time!
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Welcome arbitraryarmor
Please excuse the intrusion of our confusion about an allusion to illusion.
I have come to the conclusion that we need the inclusion, a brand new
transfusion of fresh blood to suffuse us with an infusion of new intellect.
The cliquish collusion that fosters preclusion that leads to exclusion is NOT
what we wish so we welcome your wit and your wisdom and armor
(not that you'll need it... [the armor {jeez, why is everybody so quick to jump?}]).
P.S.
Bena: Your allusion to my allusion of life to illusion is a not a
delusion as my allusion to life as illusion makes life an allusion
(a very tiny one begging for Halloween candies).
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clearly your allusion to this illusion is an elusion of delusion.
welcome to crazytown, new members!
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(10-22-2014, 07:31 AM)cjchaffin Wrote: clearly your allusion to this illusion is an elusion of delusion. Elusion of delusion is not strain'd,
It droppeth as allusion to illusion...
our place in this is ordered by the odds;
it blesseth those who dare to speak it twice.
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(10-22-2014, 11:24 AM)bena Wrote: my head hurts Welcome arbitraryarmor
(Watch out for 'bena', 'cjchaffin', and most especially the one who calls himself 'billy'.)
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i refuse to be an illusory protagonist or arch whatever ...i am indeed a mere god. hi to all the newbs.
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Hello all of you, I am pretty stoked about this forum, I hope to make good use of the critiques and find out if I feel like I should write another poem possibly many more. I don't take it lightly but I do write emotionally and quickly without thought to the form, I just channel ... that is the way I paint and play music so it's all I know. I haven't written any poetry beyond the single poem I have posted yesterday and now revised today and I haven't read any in years either, but words hit me in the face last night and they weren't a song which is usually what I come up with late at night, so I needed to do something with them and here I am.
I don't know enough to be taken very seriously in critiques, but Ill be giving it my all and saying what I feel - from at least a reader's perspective if not a true poet.
Lovely
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hi jess and welcome to the house.
write away, it's one of the better ways to improve. saw some of your feedback so thanks for that. don't worry about being taken seriously. all the poets who want to improve will take what you say seriously even if they don't use your suggestions. if that was your first poem i'm impressed, more so that you did an edit. keep it up
(10-22-2014, 11:01 PM)Jesstice Wrote: Hello all of you, I am pretty stoked about this forum, I hope to make good use of the critiques and find out if I feel like I should write another poem possibly many more. I don't take it lightly but I do write emotionally and quickly without thought to the form, I just channel ... that is the way I paint and play music so it's all I know. I haven't written any poetry beyond the single poem I have posted yesterday and now revised today and I haven't read any in years either, but words hit me in the face last night and they weren't a song which is usually what I come up with late at night, so I needed to do something with them and here I am.
I don't know enough to be taken very seriously in critiques, but Ill be giving it my all and saying what I feel - from at least a reader's perspective if not a true poet.
Lovely
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I forgot a formal introduction....probably because I'm not a particularly formal person. I started to write poetry because from a young age I always dreamed to be a painter. Since my dexterity is dreadful, I try to paint the world with words. I'm not quite sure how to do one of these, so I'll list off some basic facts about my personality that everyone pretends to care about:
- college student
- singer/composer
- brusque
- neophyte poet
- semi-avid reader
- reclusive
- i play a lot of video games.
- my name is coy the word, not the fish. koi fish weird me out. albeit the correct spelling is koi, many falsely spell it coy.
"A man with true morals behaves the same, whether starving or sated."
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Hi, Jess and coy, glad to have you here. Hope you dig in and have fun.
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