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Senryu Prayers
Grant me wisdom, Lord,
before I die. It leads to
better epitaphs.
The joy of others
is vicarious. Lord, grant me
wit to cause it.
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Hi duke-
While this follows a 5-7-5 structure, it feels more like a few sentences than senryu. That said, they are lovely prayers.
Mark
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Grant me wisdom, Lord,
before I die. It leads to
It, and we are different.
The rules I don't know
of this short form athletic.
It is the haint.
Trump. Harris. It
The joy of others
wit grant me
, Lord . . .
I know that breaks up the pattern and affective rhythm of what you wrote.