01-29-2013, 03:14 PM
I love the phrase "sandy lake". The poem's first half is the best, in my opinion, because it elegantly describes action, making it accessible to non-baseball fans, whereas the second half becomes a bit bogged down in esoteric details. For instance, what's a "grit curtain" (that could just be a metaphor I'm missing) and what does "umpire avers with 2 syllables" mean? Aside from the occasionally awkward syntax (L2 of verse three felt strange; "speaks aplomb"?), though, this is a good, gentle sports poem. Thank you for the read
"We believe that we invent symbols. The truth is that they invent us; we are their creatures, shaped by their hard, defining edges." - Gene Wolfe