03-27-2013, 06:30 PM 
	
	
	
		hi tommy, be careful of telling the poem, beware of cliche of which you have quite a few, and spell check, make it original, make it bang like the dancers heels, 
thanks for the read.
	
	
	
thanks for the read.
(03-27-2013, 05:00 PM)Tommy Wrote: He sits aside while lovers dance
The man with the Spanish guitar. feels a bit weak, is he Spanish or is the guitar Spanish? if the latter then why not, the Spanish guitarist
His blood aroused by a familiar embrace at this point you need an image,
Toque gitano o flamenco.
He’s traced her spine and held her curves
The nuance of his lover.
She springs to life in his embrace can something else be used instead of embrace, which is repetition
Delighted by his prowess.
The dancers stir like tangled buganvilia bougainvillea
In a fragrant summer breeze,
An exuberant bouquet
Of twirling skirts and smiling red lips
Which he bestows upon his lover.
Hands must clap
Heels must tap
Legs must dance
His passion grows only stronger.
The man with the Spanish guitar.

 

