woke up sneezing

[serge gurkski]

the intro isn't too bad, it makes the poem feel as though it's about something real (to which only the poet knows the answer) the dual language of the poem doesn't really work well for me though i know it will for some. a little wordy in places but it carries a great voice for the most part. the use of italics in certain parts of the poem would make it pop. (stand out) the Gilgamesh line threw me a curve ball the train of though is almost seamless and you move from carriage to carriage with ease, like i said, just an odd and or i that could be removed without losing any of the poems power. though the poem start with a great loss, it feels to me that it's more a statement of lifestyle. that that's just the way it was. I enjoyed the read/ride

Thank you, billy! These were originally two poems. The Latin was so fitting my state when I wrote this. That is why it is in and also because of the classical philology line (Homer and Horace)
Indeed it is meant to be an affirmation of life. When someone very close to you decides to not go on anylonger, you have 2 options: to follow that person or not. I obviously did not. So, that behaviour alone is already the affirmation. It happened 8 years ago at Pentecost.