06-05-2013, 07:20 AM
My pleasure, I prefer someone who responds to critique with questions - makes it all the better to respond to 
Your first stanza is quite misleading. It almost reads like a love poem to a woman - perhaps there is where to introduce the idea of a family.
Your first stanza is quite misleading. It almost reads like a love poem to a woman - perhaps there is where to introduce the idea of a family.
- Amy
(You wouldn't be surprised to know my parents did not christen me UnicornRainbowCake.)
(You wouldn't be surprised to know my parents did not christen me UnicornRainbowCake.)