Apathetic Suicide

Apathetic Suicide

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06-15-2013, 10:53 AM

Overall I think the repetition works. It makes me feel the madness of the emotion and heightens the drama of the tipping point at the end. I agree that it would flow better without the "ands". Overall chilling but real and well done.

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Apathetic Suicide - by AllisonBangert - 06-10-2013, 03:23 AM

RE: Apathetic Suicide - by Brownlie - 06-10-2013, 04:14 AM

RE: Apathetic Suicide - by billy - 06-12-2013, 02:15 PM

RE: Apathetic Suicide - by heisenborg - 06-10-2013, 05:45 AM

RE: Apathetic Suicide - by AllisonBangert - 06-12-2013, 03:47 AM

RE: Apathetic Suicide - by R.C. KITCHENS - 06-12-2013, 03:34 PM

RE: Apathetic Suicide - by AllisonBangert - 06-19-2013, 05:28 AM

RE: Apathetic Suicide - by c.gutzwiller - 06-15-2013, 10:53 AM

RE: Apathetic Suicide - by bonevil - 06-16-2013, 09:28 AM

RE: Apathetic Suicide - by ernestgoodwell - 06-16-2013, 11:37 AM

RE: Apathetic Suicide - by MissKiss - 06-20-2013, 11:42 PM

RE: Apathetic Suicide - by Ela - 06-21-2013, 08:46 AM

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