Silence

[TheWall0912]

I agree that this poem could use some punctuation, but if you choose to keep it out that's fine too and I do think you could get rid of some cliches. Other than that, it is a great start! The end trips me up a little bit. By the lines "My grandma's second lost son, A man I never knew" did you mean that the narrator was planning on meeting her father for the first time at the beginning of this poem? And then he never arrived? If so, that makes it an even more powerful poem in my eyes. Either way, I like it, and I really like the ending.

I am terribly sorry for your loss if this is a true story.

Thanks for the read.