(open on a near deserted alleyway, half past midnight.)

[PoetryAndPhysics]

Thanks Hank, I think you're right about breaking this up into stanzas. Yep, I wanted the narrator to go unconscious while talking to someone, due to some unknown injury (in my mind, he was a mobster either gunned down or poisoned). I really like your unsure narrator interpretation, need to expand on that.