Silence

[Destructed]

I think many things I'd like to suggest have already been given, other than that I somewhat feel that this poem is just all over the place. The flow is off putting, it'd be much more intriguing if the lines of a stanza were more united. The descriptive aspect is somewhat cliché and I'd love to see more variety in vocabulary for the first couple stanzas. But it's a beautiful idea and I truly think you could make something remarkable with everyone's suggestions.