04-26-2014, 07:59 AM
Tears dry up.
Cares seem to simmer away
boiling rapidly before they are gone.
That seems the best bit. The rest of the poem is necessary in making it the best bit, and I like the dryness of the whole thing. It just seems real, the metaphors don't seem like metaphors, and I like that quality. The "minds" in the first stanza might need something, but that depends.
Cares seem to simmer away
boiling rapidly before they are gone.
That seems the best bit. The rest of the poem is necessary in making it the best bit, and I like the dryness of the whole thing. It just seems real, the metaphors don't seem like metaphors, and I like that quality. The "minds" in the first stanza might need something, but that depends.