04-27-2014, 05:45 AM
I get a strong sense of a drug intoxicated schizophrenic for this poem. For The first 2 stanzas, I feel the speaker was on a drug binge before in their life but has been off of it for a while up until now. I feel you went literal with the 3rd stanza but that is actually good because you give the reader more of an idea. The one thing that I didn't like in the poem was the line, "Swallowing little pink pills." This is either very literal or a very broad idea. Either, the speaker is on drugs, or is relating what they have been dealing with recently with drugs. I'm gonna guess that it is literal. If it isn't literal, don't take any offense. 5th stanza, I feel the speaker can break through this terrible mess they're dealing with but they choose not to and their chances of getting out are getting more slim because the wall is getting thicker. I found the 5th stanza to be the greatest part of the poem and it truly is great.